Once there was a creepy forst. Some people wanted to go and have a picnic in the forst. When they finished their picnic that time it was, turning dark. When they were going home, they saw something in the forst and they wanted, to check it out, and when they did it was a pack of wolfs, then they wolfs tried to eat them because they were all hungry. They were running so fast and the wolfs, were so close to them and they, were so scared. Then they were hiding and when they were hiding, the wolf's ran, pass them all, and they all was so happy. To be countion
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Hi Alex, I like your creepy story especially when the hungry pack of wolves ran past the people. I also like how you used an adjective to describe the forest. I look forward to the next part. You might like to use more adjectives your story could get really really scary.
ReplyDeleteMr Matai
Hi Alex,
ReplyDeleteIt is great to see you sharing some of your writing on your blog. I like how you used the word 'creepy' to describe the forest, as soon as I read that I knew something scary might happen. Maybe you could include some information about the characters in the story, you describe them as people but I want to know more. Were they young, old, boys, girls?
I look forward to reading the next part of this story.
Miss Satherley
Hi Alex
ReplyDeleteWho wouldn't be scared if you were being chased by a bunch of wolves?
I enjoyed what you wrote but would like to hear more.
Thanks for sharing.
Mrs Bowman